The Lyrical Assassins Brotherhood Poetry

His Mistake



So this is week two of the Visual Circus and we decided to bring two classics to you at once.  First the video/song My Mistake featuring Usher and Fabulous and the poem by our very own Ashley “The Lyrical Gymnast” Diaz. The goal, for you, is to listen to the video and write a poem using the emotion of the song or of the visual.  Either way, this is already great… Now all we need is you to make is perfect.

D-Cipher/Black Phoenix

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23 responses

  1. I love this because it so true. I have seen this from so many angles. Great write Ashley and thank you for rocking the VC with us. I look forward to reading all the other poems.

    David

    October 7, 2011 at 8:35 am

  2. Wow Ashley, I can picture this conversation as if you and Usher are having it in front of me. Your words capture every detail of a women torn by hurt in the past trying to replace it with real love and she is not able to properly transition. This is a dynamo of emotional poetry. The visual circus is happy to have you bring it…..

    October 7, 2011 at 11:23 am

    • MizzFab

      great piece ashley .lovin the theme

      October 7, 2011 at 1:57 pm

      • Ashley Diaz

        MizzFab… thanks mamitas!! =)

        October 7, 2011 at 5:12 pm

    • Ashley Diaz

      Thank you Black Phoenix!! Glad y’all hit me up with this one… I’ll be happy to do as many as u throw at me!! U can bet that, neva gotta sweat that!! Poetry is so much apart of me and I can only write what I feel and I have felt this way more than not… glad God’s healing my heart now…. Appreciate U!! *hugs*

      October 7, 2011 at 5:08 pm

  3. My Mistake…….Her Heartbreak

    So sat back think about the things you said
    How you wished me dead,
    Wished me gone,
    And you want to be alone
    Girl, I was wrong,
    I’ll let you move on.
    But before,
    There some things I have to say
    I’m sorry, I know sorry won’t take the pain away
    And you were never deserving of the things I did
    The hurt I caused you and the kids
    What a way to live, Sorry.. Damn
    I know I said that, but repeating seems like the best thing to do
    I sit and wonder why I cheating on you, beating on you
    I knew one day you would be through
    With me, With us, with this life all together
    When I gone your life will get so much better
    That’s why I’m writing you this letter
    Want you to know in my crazy mind I care
    Stop, I know you looking at this with that blank stare
    That disgusted glare
    How could I say a thing….
    Everyday I saw you my heart would sing
    Unbelievable, I know
    But I was broken and did not know how to show
    I wish you success and may the pain be lifted from your chest
    Funny how a deserted eagle is scary, when its point at your own chest
    The weight of what I’ve done is causing me massive stress
    My will to live is gone, like I will be soon
    Promise, you will think of me when you stare at the moon
    Cocking this hammer back is the last favor I can give you tonight
    Goodbye,
    I never showed you your worth now I have a worthless life
    (BANG!)

    October 7, 2011 at 11:24 am

    • MizzFab

      wow the emotions in that piece outstanding bp

      October 7, 2011 at 1:59 pm

      • Thank you Mizz Fabb. I have lived the Usher half of this song. I could only think of an excuse for such treatment after reading Ashley’s piece….

        October 7, 2011 at 5:49 pm

    • Ashley Diaz

      Black Phoenix… u made me cry… idk what to say but even though it wasn’t written to me or about me… iut’s like I needed to hear it and it felt like a piece inside of me frred itself a bit more… great piece!!!

      October 7, 2011 at 5:13 pm

      • Your piece is an example of an eternal circle, get hurt then hurt, the honesty in telling someone you are not ready shows strength. Your words were also the motivation for me seeing it from the one who did the wrong… They really never know what they had until its gone.. Very powerful piece Ashley!!

        October 7, 2011 at 5:52 pm

    • Awww!

      October 7, 2011 at 7:22 pm

    • That one ricocheted. Great write BP.

      David

      October 8, 2011 at 5:58 am

  4. MizzFab

    Her walls are up
    and she wont let me in
    its like being charged for a crime
    you never did commit
    move slowly
    or she will run away
    screaming madly
    move slowly and try to climb over these walls
    just to put arms around her
    just to have them pushed away
    she doesn’t need me
    she just needs to be right
    and if i go through this one more time
    i’m out
    cause i can’t deal with their mistakes
    her always looking for mine
    when i just want to love her
    but she doesn’t want to be loved
    she wants her space
    she just wants revenge
    from the others who did her wrong
    and i am stuck singing the same damn song
    lonely sleepless nights
    trying to brace myself for that last fight
    when she can’t take no more
    and i am tempted to walk out the door
    her walls are up
    and i have no strength to tear them down
    i have no strength
    to take this for one more day
    but i love her
    and she pushes further away
    and there is not much more i can say
    cause each day i wake up on trial
    wondering if i ever will be acquitted

    October 7, 2011 at 2:20 pm

    • I know that feeeling all to well, and the truth is you never get acquitted for someone elses mistakes. You eithe rchoose to leave or choose to stya.. I love your piece Mizz fabb…

      October 7, 2011 at 5:54 pm

    • Wonderful use of imagery. I love the flow and the end was “FAB”ulous.

      David

      October 8, 2011 at 5:57 am

  5. Ashley I love this I think some times we do fall in a cycle dating the same person over again. Then at times we want to take the bits and pieces of the good the person had that hurt us and apply them to the new one.

    October 7, 2011 at 3:24 pm

  6. Can You?

    Sometimes I can’t see past the dark to get to the light that you have placed in my heart with your love. I
    desire your arms your embrace the closeness of your face.

    The venom of your love boils the blood in my veins

    Sending me to a heated rush driving me totally insane

    Your spirit provides a safe haven for my weary heart

    I look in your eyes and see what your mouth can’t speak

    The thought of you renders me submissive and weak

    Could you be my happy the reason I wake up and breathe

    I really need happy I need to see the sun when it’s dark

    When I cry can you be the one that saves me from the flood of sorrow

    When I need a hug will your arms be my safe place

    You say that you love me I had some one to tell me that once

    Love turned strange and love made me cry and screams of why

    Echoed through my head my heart felt empty as if I was dead

    Can you be the one that save my heart from love’s apocalypse?

    Can you be the one to stop my heart form crying a river?

    Can you control the typhoon of doubts that love brings?

    Can You?

    October 7, 2011 at 3:27 pm

    • Yes… I meaan. uhhhmm.. Great poem. I dig it. lol. Very emotionally felt.

      David

      October 8, 2011 at 5:56 am

  7. Ashley Diaz

    Thank you David for including me in this… love to do it anytime… and I’ll be on the site much more… it’s in my favz!!! =) I’m looking forward to seeing what comes of this as well! YAY!

    October 7, 2011 at 5:08 pm

  8. Dear diary,
    I met the most beautiful sunshine today
    It was like Allah planned for her to come my way
    Her smile was a blessing, never felt a warmth like that before
    But, I don’t think I could let her in, my heart still bleeding raw
    See, it has been destroyed by the last B*%@#….., Let me stop
    Every time I think of times wasted my heart drops, back to the plot
    This new one seems different, I don’t want to do her wrong
    She don’t deserve the back lash that’s in my heart, I need to move on
    She trying to heal me, it seems she won’t, give up
    But All I can think is “it started like this before”, 4 yrs later it ended, abrupt!
    How can I give her my trust, is it too soon to, well maybe its not
    When I awake it seems like she always on my top
    Always on my mind, but so are the nightmares of the past
    Longevity is my goal, but my soul questions how long this one will last
    Is this the one, or she the two, waiting to do me in
    Mind verses emotions, a battle not easy to win
    So I gotta to pray, place my head on my rug, asking for help this night and when I wake
    Oh Allah please help accept her and not make her pay for her mistakes…..

    October 7, 2011 at 6:14 pm

    • Nicely written, but dont trust her either. lol.

      David

      October 8, 2011 at 5:54 am

  9. ~NewArk Oracle~

    Enjoyed watching the Usher video as well as the featured Post by Ashley. Beautiful piece really enthralling to say the least.

    Its the NewArk Oracle coming atcha in the room of the Visual Circus….yes yes!!

    HIS MISTAKE

    So Many Lingering Thoughts Of Yesterday
    Bought Here With Me On Display Today
    Apprehension Got Me Jumping At You
    Confused & Hurt Still I Don’t Know What To Do
    The Relenting Pass Has Caused This Trouble
    Popping In Seeming To Surface Like A Bubble

    Baby I Apologize For My Line Of Questioning
    They’ve Been Poignant Distasteful Better Left Not Mentioning
    You See I’ve Built This Wall For Protection
    Chipped At & Crumbling To Block The Negative Intentions
    & Well I Don’t Know How To Begin To Tare It Down
    Its Saved Me Many Times I can”t Begin To Count

    I Don’t At All Mean To Hurt You, Not My Intent
    Jumping The Gun Before The Cause Has Been My Net
    Whatever It Takes I’ll Do It, Taring Down This Wall Creating A New Page
    Help Me Change, I Want To Change, I Need The Change
    No More Selfish Blaming Of Things Not Done
    I Promise To Work On It, No More Jumping The Gun

    No More Living In The Past Hurt
    Today I’ll Bury it deep Beneath The Earth
    I See You Really Are The Man For Me
    Thank You For Your Time & Patience I’m Becoming Free
    Wiping The Slate Clean, Leaving Only Todays Pleasant Memories
    True Happiness With You From Here On Out Will Be Our Compensary

    Staying & Loving Me Unconditionally
    You Have Done So Much In Such A small Space In Time Already
    I Don’t Ever Want To Lose You
    I Too Love You

    October 11, 2011 at 9:22 am

    • I am def feeling this one. I wish more ppl could learn and let go of their past. Thanks for rocking it Sonya.

      David

      October 11, 2011 at 12:49 pm

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